I’m not sure how to feel about this one, so you guys tell me! It’s quite a bit different than how I normally write.
Come as you are,
not the façade
the others fall for.
Come as you are,
remove the costume,
this is not a masquerade.
This is me wanting to love you.
Wanting to see you,
your fears,
your smiles,
your tears.
Come as you are,
be vulnerable,
if only for me.
Remove the shackles,
walk free of weight,
come as you are.
It’s you I want to feel,
on moonless nights,
come as you are.
This is me asking for you.
Only you,
not some,
all of you.
The world stands still,
waiting for you,
come as you are.
Come as you are.
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It is lyrical. Well done.
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Thank you ❤
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“Come as you are, as you were
As I want you to be
As a friend, as a friend
As a known enemy.”
Sorry, had to do that. 😁
But, this is an awesome poem. I loved reading it, and the meaning is powerful, especially with being who you truly are in vulnerable circumstances. Amazing work on this piece. 👍
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No need to apologize, you are just revealing half of my inspiration 😉
You have good tastes, my friend.
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Thanks. You have good tastes as well! Nirvana is awesome.
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BOOKMARKED!
Honestly, it could be I’m just a sucker for that particular theme — authenticity. But the poem is instant love for me. Maybe it’s just the theme, but I suspect it’s more than that. I’ll be returning to it. We’ll see how ages over time.
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I’m glad you like it. I’ve been trying different types of poems lately, (though never traditional styles [Maybe I will, idk]) and I’ve been enjoying it 🙂 I wasn’t used to the simplicity I put in this poem, but I enjoyed it, maybe I’ll write more like it in the future, idk lol
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I like it… it reafa effortless
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*reads
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❤
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This isn’t bad; mind if I ask what it’s interpretation is?
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Very simple and direct: asking someone to allow me to see, and love all of them, the good, the bad, the beautiful, the ugly.
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Ah, cool 😀
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“Come as you are,
remove the costume,
this is not a masquerade.
This is me wanting to love you.”
I love those lines.
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Thank you, same, actually, it was the first thing I thought of, I actually built the poem around it.
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That’s quite interesting.
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I do it a lot, think of lines, than construct around it. I do it more often in the novel in verse I’m writing. My brain works weird ig
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An excellent way to ask someone to simply discard the hats and masks they wear and to show themselves nakedly as they are. Excellent. I like the Nirvana allusion, too.
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Oh, thank you! Your comment is appreciated immensely.
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You are so very welcome.
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Oooooh I love this one ❤ It's very poetic, the structure is different (which I love) and the meaning is so awesome, it's just a beautiful piece. I love it 🙂
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Thank yoouuu, I gotta try something different once in a while 😉
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It’s inviting vulnerability and authenticity. It’s good
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Thank you
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Loved it! Unfortunately, Nirvana ruined it for me! But it is great
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Then pretend nirvana isn’t involved xD
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I tried! But now I have that song stuck in my mind
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I’m sorry xD 😦
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Don’t be! You took me back to the roots
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I feel like this should end with “I swear I don’t have a gun.”
It’s good to try different writing styles. You never want to be predictable. That’s why I like to do poetry challenges in different styles. This is simple but sweet and sincere. I like it.
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Haha, that would be an interesting twist
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